My Terrible Web Comic: The Second King Of Sevren

Maybe a few years ago I got this idea for a fantasy story in my head that I wanted to exist in some way. For this reason, even though I can’t draw I made a very badly done 60 page drawn comic which has art worse than Sonichu. This is partially because I rushed, partially because I didn’t care and partially because I can’t draw well. I’ve decided to release this story today because it might give someone a laugh. I tried to adapt my pencil drawings to computer by drawing in paint so the opening few pages are in colour!

The pencil drawings are very feint so I will use captions to explain what’s going on. Pencil really doesn’t show up well on film! The reads left to right.

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This would have had my second name on it but I didn’t want to put it here
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The original explained this by having the main character click a kiss anime advert saying “Win a million pounds” which summoned the UFO

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The original didn’t have a giant mouth inside the black hole but I thought it would be cool
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Don’t really have an explanation for this one
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“Never Click on ads” , “Welcome to Mans’ Field” , “wobble”, “what’s going on”, “I transported you here, I try to bring you happiness. Now I will go” , “This is for your happiness” (“leaving”)
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(Zooms out on MC and UFO drops a motorbike for him) “Cool” , “LETS FIND A CITY”
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(Shows massive city) “Seems fine enough” , (height chart showing MC raise in altitude), “I finally got here”
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(Image came out very badly – it’s a huge gate to the city shown on the previous panel)
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(Knock nock) “What is it now”, “I hate this Job”, “Who is it this time?”, (MC:) “hi” , “Why? Why now? Why does this stuff happen to me!” . (MC:) “Ok, I kind of have to get in though”, (???:) “Hey Kid!”
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?: “Do you want an easy way to earn some money” MC: “I love money!” ?: “I can get you 50” MC: “I’ll do it!”, “£50 wow!” , ?: “I’m not paying you in pounds, I’m paying you in…” , “Souls” MC: “Souls?” , ?: “Yeah that’s out currency” , MC: “Alright then” , ?: “Here’s your orders” TASKS: 1. Break into city 2. Pretend to be the king of Sevren 3. Visit the castle 4. Pretend to have magic powers 5. Do this for two days
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MC: “I’ll do it!” , ?: “Wear these” (DA! DA!) , MC: “Alright, time to clime this” . “oh” “How can I get in?”, “Wasn’t there a cave there?” (“Inside the cave), “What’s going on here?”
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MC: “I’ll take this candle” , “Light switch!” (sees dead hanging people) MC: “Let’s keep that off” ??: “Hold it!”
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??: “You” , “Only the…” “ahhhhh!”, MC: “First time I’ve seen a fat person run” , “I contemplated why he ran for 10 minutes” ??? (Character who looks like Kite from HxH): “Someone better not be in my cave.” , MC: “Hi can you help me?” (Woosh) , “He ran away?”
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MC: “What a strange city” , “I guess with it being in layers it’s ok” (diagram showing layout of city, if you can’t see it very well just imagine full city from AOT except medevil and with a castle at the center. MC: “HI! , “Why are they running?”
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(Man who was guarding gate, let’s call him guard): “Finaly here” (knock knock) Princess ???: “Enter” Guard: “Princess, the king of Sevren is here” , (Fat man, let’s call him fat man): “Princess” , “Sorry to delay but the king of Sevren has entered the city through the cave entrance!” (close up of princess)
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CHAPTER 2: The Second Marches. MC: “Who even is the king of Sevren? Anyway, let’s visit the castle” (“run”)
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? (we’ll call him strange guy): “Hold it” , “Let me explain who the king of Sevren is” , “Here is the map!”
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MC: “Why are there so many castles here?” Strange Guy: “It’s all part of the recent feud”

All these countries set up defensive castles, however the Sevren army breached all of them causing lines of castles to be within Sevren territory, the castle we’re in now, Korona, was made as a defense against Sevren. It caused them to lose confidence and try to invade the rest of the planet. They eventually gave up their invasion but now the world looks like this.

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Sevren takes up most of the glove and rules violently. With their successful army prospering loads and superior battle tactics they were able to concur lots of land quickly. Now a peace treaty has been signed but times are still risky.

(Arrow pointing to the king of Sevren (He looks exactly like the main character but with a big bushy beard)) “The king of Sevren” (zzzzzzzz e.c.t) MC: “What? Oh cool another map, I get to pretend to have all this land.” , “I’ll walk to the castle then” Strange Guy: “Ok then” (thinking: “Retard”)

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New guard: “Princess the king of Sevren is here, orders please” Princes (thinking): “The king of Sevren uses magic so, if he was here to kill again then these two arseholes, I mean peasants  would be dead. So what’s he here for? If he’s not going to kill then he’s here to talk. Why did these retards (peasants) run away then? Oh well, I… wait. “The king of Sevren” Guard: “Yes he’s here.”
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Princess “Bring him here, but make sure he doesn’t attack. If he does then kill him” Guard: “Yes princess Kova” (Alarm) (flick) Guard: “Guards, sound the alarms.” (MC outside of castle looking around)
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MC: “What’s going on?” , Guard; “Y, y, you’re coming with us!” MC: “Where to?” (Guard fainted from shock) , “Why do they run away?” (flashback to notes where it says 4. Pretend to have magic powers) “Oh” Gate guard: “This time I’ll stand up to him for sure”
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MC: “Oh hi it’s you again” Gate Guard(thinking): “No, today I’ll stand up for myself” , “You’re coming with me to the palace” , MC: “Great! I was planning to go there anyway!” Gate guard: “What?” , “Never mind if you want to go you need to go in my cage” Gate guard (thinking): “Oh, now I’ve done it. He may have gone to the castle but he wouldn’t lower himself to go in a cage” (MC in cage): “What now?”
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Gate Guard (thinking): “Oh no, how that he’s in the cage he has a reason to be angry” “This won’d end well for me” MC: “Hey” Gate guard: “Ahhh” (he drops the cage down the hill and MC falls out”
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Some time later. Gate guard: “We’re through gate 1” , “We’re through gate 2” , “We’re through gate 3” “e.c.t” (MC is in front of castle)
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ninja Knight: “Wait, as a ninja knight I can’t allow you to enter” MC “Ok then” (flashback to rule 4) MC: “Move aside ninja knight, I shouldn’t have to remind you that I can kill you this second with magic.” Ninja Knight: “I came prepared to die, death means nothing to a ninja Knight,” MC: “Kono Suburashi, Sekai Ni…” (Shows strange guy throwing blow dart)
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MC: “Wow, I actually have magic!” (map of castle bottom floors, route) Guard: “Wow he didn’t even bow once.”
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MC: “Um, hi” Princess Kova: “King of Sevren, you look different from when I last saw you. For one thing you’ve finally shaved.” MC: “…well..yeah…” (thinking) “Does she know” Princess: “So what do you want?” , MC (thinking): “I hope this is a good bluff.” out loud “The king of Sevren doesn’t not want, he gets. I shouldn’t need to ask, give me what I want.” (thinking) “oh wait” out lout ” Let’s not forget, with my magic theirs very little I need.”
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Princess: “We can let you stay here for a few days but we can negotiate later, in more privacy” MC “Yeah ok” , “After being dragged here In a cage I expect good food.” Princess: “I apologise for that.” (thinking) “This might not go so well” (LATER IN THE EVENING) “so” “so what did you say?”
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MC: “Move” (he makes a person leave and receives orders from the strange guy who’s sitting next to the princess) “Hi” princess “So what do you want?” , MC: “If I don’t have it by tomorrow I’ll ask for it.”
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CHAPTER 3 , MEANWHILE IN CAPITAL CITY CORONA (SEVREN)
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Strange Guy from earlier: Hmm a letter” Letter: King of Sevren, We have urgent news, an imposter is impersonating you in Kova and has gained entry to the palace in Korona. He hasn’t said what he wants but he i’d advise dealing with it, I recommend using magic to kill him. from A spy”
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Strange guy: “Oh no, we can’t be having this. Let’s change a few things.” Letter: “King Of Sevren An imposter has arrived at the gate of Corona, he;s impersonating you, king of Sevren. He has murdered people however the princess has accepted him as you! This is an outrage, not even war can pay for this, the imposter must die at the least. I recommend sending your army to kill him from a spy” (THE GATES OF CORONA, THIS WILL WORK) (SEALING WAX)
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AT THE KING OF SEVRENS SMALL COUNCIL MEETING, strange guy: “King, there has been a letter” (reading) KOS: “This is an outrage”, “I shall not send my army but I will deal with him personally, they would probably be too scared to even oppose me.
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MC: “Today was a pretty strange day” (FOR ONE THING) Princess: “Can you use magic to extinguish that candle.” MC: “I don’t like using magic without reason, sorry” princess  “You are no longer welcome here if you don’t do that!”
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(BUT LUCKILY) (THE AIR FROM HIS BLOWDART EXTINGUISHED IT WITHOUT HER NOTICING MC: “oh well time to sleep”
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(Strange guy wakes MC up) “Hello” , “How are you sleeping?” “let’s talk”
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Stramge guy: “The king of Sevren knows about you” , “Times will be more difficult from now on…” , “But if you read those orders which you DROPPED earlier then you’ll be ok.” (He read the letter before going to sleep)
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(In castle Corona, it’s important to say that castle Korona and castle Corona are two separate things and not spelling mistakes)
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?: “Now it’s time” (Princess’ Quarters)
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(LET’S TAKE SOME TIME TO VIEW OUR CHARACTERS, SINE YOU DON’T KNOW THEIR NAMES YET.” (from top left to bottom right: “The king of Sevren Name: Rod Man” , “The Princess Of Kova Name: Alice Kova” , “The creepy guy (I’ve been calling him strange guy) Name: Rob Bell” , “The gate manager (gate guard) Name: “Chad Gate” , “The King Of Sevren Name: UNKNOWN (of course some people know)” , “Fat Guy Name: Andre Muck (He actually is captain of the knights and part of the queens council)”
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?: “It’s done” (THE NEXT MORNING) Guard: “Oh gosh no. The princess, she’s dead.”
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Fat guy: “The only person who could have done this… HIM!” (show MC sleeping (MC’s name is Rod as seen in the slide earlier)
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MC: “Why am I in prison?”
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(MEANWHILE OUTSIDE THE GATES) (THE KING OF SEVREN IS ANGRY)
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CHAPTER 4: SEVRENS WRATH
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Gate Guard: £Looks like a fake king of Sevren has arrived” Fat Guy: “Don’t let him in Chad, he has to be a fake” , “Let’s Armour up!” , “We shall not be fooled imposter we will not let you pass”
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King of Sevren: “Oh?” (everything is burning)
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FOR HOURS ROD WAITED (Middle is MC and bottom in King of Sevren)
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King Of Sevren: “How could I let this happen?” “YOU FOOL” , “How can you be this stupid?”
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(King Of Sevren rips out the guy’s heart)
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King of Sevren: “What’s this letter” , “7 recieve your 50 souls” , “Hope the souls we’re worth it” , “let’s absorb this soul”
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(This is meant to look cool)
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Sign says underworld MC (thinking): “Oh, all this because of a kiss anime ad, at least my hearts ok though” (in the paper version the MC got here by clicking a kissanime AD and having it all go wrong)
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(GATE OF SECOND HELL)
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(7 DAYS LATER) MC: “This is a long time to be floating for” (scene of lots of people stuck on a building with mashing teeth underneath
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(People are jumping in) MC: “What’s going on?” “The only way out of here is to get through the mouth but people keep getting chomped up.”
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MC: “Do I know you?” ? “er no” (not even I understand a lot of this comic) (LET’S THINK OF HOW TO DO THIS.”
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(IF I’M A GHOST THAT MEANS I CAN GO STRAIGHT THROUGH FINE.) MC: “Whee!” (Meaningless words)
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MC: NANI? (TRANSFORMED INTO A BABY)

So as you can tell this story is just a prologue to a much bigger event and it suffers from a lot more problems than bad art. Either way I hope you got something out of this.

Also uploading this took so much of my free storage space!

 

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5 thoughts on “My Terrible Web Comic: The Second King Of Sevren

  1. Wow, so cool! Your art style makes me think of my brothers both on the computer and in the note book, which is kind of neat. I wish i had the attention span to do this, But I have a couple first pages lying around.

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    • Yeah I used paint and line / shape tools to create everything there and I actually think they came off pretty good when you consider how they were made. Also thank you for not praising my art style! It was really bad and rushed, I can draw better but I wanted to make it as fast as possible.

      I also find that a lot of people have more story ideas than actual stories written / drawn which is kind of sad. Glad you seemed to get something out of it!

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    • Thank you! It’s clear to see because I didn’t bother retaking poor shots that after a while I couldn’t be bothered to continue. I’m glad you thought the story was fun, I thought it would be a discredit to my past self if I explained the plot so I just wrote what the panels said because I have poor hand writing. That was intended to be the prequel of a much larger story, where the guy lived as an adult in the baby’s body at the end. But I guess I stopped caring at that point, thinking about the rest of the story I also know that it doesn’t make sense. Especially when the main plot hinges on the main characters spelling mistake. I don’t think you remember but the two cities Korona and Corona sound the same but are very different.

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